Monday, December 13, 2010

Is this a Thesis?

I am proud of all of you for the thinking and stress that has gone in to creating a really strong thesis for your research. Please post your thesis to the blog so that other students and teachers can offer you feedback. Once you have posted your thesis, pick one of your fellow students and read their thesis. Then, offer CONSTRUCTIVE feedback based on what your understanding is of a quality thesis.
                               Post by the end of class.  

72 comments:

  1. How are videogames potentially educational and how can we use this resource?

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  3. If police brutality towards minorities in the Bay Area is to stop, then the hiring practices and training of the departments must be reformed.

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  4. Video game addiction is a growing problem for teens and young asdults, causing mental issues such as loss of reality and isolation of friends and family.

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  5. Funding for elective programs at the Fremont Federation of Schools must increase if the recruitment rate of gang members is to decrease.

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  6. MUSIC(THERAPY)IS MORE EFFECTIVE IN COMBATING DEPRESSION IN TEENAGERS THAN CONVENTIONAL THERAPIES AND ANTIDEPRESSANTS.

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  7. Why are so many people in rural Mexico starving? and what are it's dramatic causes and effects to the people.

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  8. California's is a having a major problem that affects the children K-8 health development obesity is a big problem in the state of Califirnia what are the school and parent doing to fight this big obesity

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  9. Corporal punishment is a type of physical abuse caused to children. it happens more among low income families, so we have to look more into the cause and effect and ways to resolve this, those receiving government assistance for their children the government should provide programs to help families.

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  10. When looking at the United States’ distribution of wealth and power it is seen that capitalism is anti democratic and socialism would benefit those who are not part of the elite upper class; the combination capitalism and socialism is needed in order to create an equal society that provides for all classes.

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  11. Teens that are effected by domestic violence may continue the cycle into their adulthood's.So, we need more counseling groups probably at as early as middle school.

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  12. In order for high school aged California students of deported parents to succeed in graduating from high school, California state government should create an incentive program that provides economic support for those high school students.

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  13. Mam speaking immigrants are more successful in this coutry than other latino immigrants gruops because of strong support network within the mam community

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  14. @ sabina, what sort of ages , and what type of programs, but so far this is good, to be more specific why would economic support would help them graduate

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  15. We need to figure out a way to stop Infanticide in India that has been one major cause of sex-ratio inbalance, making females the minorities of the country.

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  16. In response to Erica H:

    Not all children that are exposed to domestic abuse. So how can we be so sure which kids will eventurally continue the cycle of abuse in their adulthood?

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  17. Latino immigrants contribute with a large amount of the economy. If there are no immigrants in the U.S. the economy will dicrease in large amounts.

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  18. @BRENDA - i agree with your thesis because most teenagers say that music helps them calm down or focus more when doing work. and teens most likely turn to music when frustrated or depressed.

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  19. "Jesus said...
    When looking at the United States’ distribution of wealth and power it is seen that capitalism is anti democratic and socialism would benefit those who are not part of the elite upper class; the combination capitalism and socialism is needed in order to create an equal society that provides for all classes."'

    "socialism would benefit those who are not part of the elite upper class"

    I think it would be good to mention who it benefits such as the general public or people of low income as it's only inferred and not clear.

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  20. the united states and nato countries are ran by an elite group of wealthy rather than its appointed leaders

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  21. I propose that a government funded program be set up to help teenage prostitute pull away from prostitution and offer economical and social support to help them succeed in their adult lives.

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  22. Dennis said...
    Video game addiction is a growing problem for teens and young asdults, causing mental issues such as loss of reality and isolation of friends and family.

    to:dennis
    do you think that vedios game are a cause of teen violence?

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  23. @ ericah: what is the average age they need more help? and what are the requirements of a counseling group in order to make the kid feel comfterable? Overall i feel like it's a good topic and good luck.

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  24. @Dr. Brenda Silveria-Svensson.
    What if the music glorifies violence?
    What type of music specifically?
    Would this method be effective for everyone?
    What about emo music? wouldn't that cause more depression?

    From your friend Micheal "communist" Moore

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  25. In response to Juan Mora:
    Why are people doing this to the women? Is the whole population getting lower if the women's population is decreasing? How do they kill the female babies?

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  26. carmelina said...
    Mam speaking immigrants are more successful in this coutry than other latino immigrants gruops because of strong support network within the mam community

    Is "Mam" an abbreviation for a word? you should put the entire word so we can have a better understanding on the thesis. Your thesis so far sounds very clear and thoughtful, but Mam is a word I dont recognize and highly doubt the general audience will recognize it also.

    - Christopher Soto

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  27. 3rika_1206 said...
    Latino immigrants contribute with a large amount of the economy. If there are no immigrants in the U.S. the economy will dicrease in large amounts.

    erika: why doyou think thast they dont want to pass the dream act? that would help everybody in thew long term.

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  28. @ EberardoL
    what kind of programs should there be to help dem and how would this help???

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  29. chris you no they do it to tthe white peolpe in sf and in sanjose i seen that on the news one year check it out on chanle 2 news and see if its still up there

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  30. @eberardo.
    what kind of help should the government give to these low-income families?
    Why are low-income families the ones that would be expected to commit corporal punishment the most?

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  31. Jesus J.
    I have read the thesis,but its not clear to me on what is captialism or socialism? How will the combination of socialism and capitalism create a equal society?

    -Sabina Torres

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  32. to jesus: capitalism and socialism are contrary ... what makes you think that you wont end up like the soviet union?

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  33. Why do woman stay in a relationship with men violent?

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  34. @Dr. Brenda Silveria-Svensson.
    What if the music glorifies violence?
    What type of music specifically?
    Would this method be effective for everyone?
    What about emo music? wouldn't that cause more depression?

    From your friend Micheal "communist" Moore

    TO JESUS: TO ANSWER YOUR DUMB QUESTIONS,STUDIES SHOW THAT MUSIC OF YOUR CHOICE HELPS YOU COPE WITH YOUR PROBLEMS.ID BE HAPPY TO LINK YOU WITH THE MANY ARTICLES I'VE READ.DRUGS LIKE HEROIN AND COCAINE ARE MORE EFFECTIVE THAN ANTIDEPRESSANTS.AND NO, MUSIC DOES NOT MAKE YOU SUICIDAL. YOU MUST BE A COMPLETE ASININE IF YOU KILL YOURSELF OVER SOME WORDS ON THE SONG. IT SHOWS HOW IMMATURE YOUR BRAIN ACTUALLY IS. IF YOU KILL YOURSELF OVER IT, YOU DESERVED IT. IT'S ONE LESS DUMB PERSON ON EARTH, WAY TO GO.YOUR DEATH MAY BE A HORRID TRAGEDY BUT NOBODY WILL REALLY CARE OTHER THAN YOUR FAMILY. WELL, THAT'S IF THEY ACTUALLY CARED TO BOTHER. YOU'RE PART OF THE STATISTIC.



    SOCIALISM TURNS INTO COMMUNISM. IT IS ALSO UNAMERICAN TO BOTHER THE ANTICHRIST.

    AND MORA, WHY DO WE EVEN CARE ABOUT THOSE KIDS? BELIEVE IT OR NOT, WE AMERICANS ARE ONLY INTERESTED IN THINGS THAT'LL BRING US MONEY.

    @SABINA
    WHY SHOULD CALIFORNIA FUND THEIR EDUCATION WHEN IT IS ALREADY FREE?

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  35. @jesus,
    so basically, joining two contradictions makes a good thing? and if so, how so?

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  36. If a zero tolerance policy for anti-LGBT language were to be created on public school campuses, then LGBT teenagers would be able to live a healthier adolescence and become successful adults.

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  38. If we have trained peer health educators available for teenagers then they could ensure that more victims of abuse would be able to leave abusive relationships.

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  39. @GENESIS RODRIGUEZ...
    how will the change in the school food setting and the parents going to do?
    if the schoolz take acction and serve healthier foods will students eat it?.
    also most parents try to help their kids eat healthier its just they can not supervise their kids when they are out there buying juck food.

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  40. The Japanese government must provide incentives for Japanese families to have more children in order to increase the population of its citizens and keep the Japanese culture alive.

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  41. Throughout time, many kids are victims of a growing problem that we have in sports today which is favoritism of youth in athletic programs. It not necessarily only affects youth it affects people of all ages who participate in these programs. This action prevents some of not even wanting to join teams or quit because of the pressure and special treatment of a few selected stars who are assumed most likely to succeed and carry out his or her dream while the others struggle to try harder and become successful as the one who already are.

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  42. @ Gene D
    Interesting topic. personally i think video games are a way to sharpen and practice a long life skill, on knowing how to read and follow directions.
    But how can this be obvious to the public eye with all the negativity perprotrated in majority of video games?

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  43. It is common knowledge that mainstream rap music destroys the mind of adolescents. However, depending on the racial background of the person listening to the music, the level of destruction is different. This paper will argue that mainstream rap music actually leads to the genocide of black adolescents.

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  44. Should tobacco ads through media (movies) be abolished because they persuade teenagers to smoke giving a "cool notion" of smoking?

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  45. @sheila Is peer educators the only way to get the point across.

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  46. Drug trafficking is a major problem there should be more done to stop it like sending in more aid and ending all the corruption in Mexico with the help of the U.S.A. by extradicting high ranking cartel members to the U.S.A for courting.

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  47. @ ma bruh Dennis.... that's a koo thesis thang bruh because alot uh ma niggz b on dem games nd dey b wastin alota money fuh no reason

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  48. In response to Jesus
    When looking at the United States’ distribution of wealth and power it is seen that capitalism is anti democratic and socialism would benefit those who are not part of the elite upper class; the combination capitalism and socialism is needed in order to create an equal society that provides for all classes.

    It seems that Capitalism is anti-democratic when there are diversity and inequality in a country because not many people want to share their proffit with others. Otherwise it will be less anti-democratic...

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  49. The matter of animal cruelty in slaughterhouses is not a huge problem to consumers unless they get sick from the meat consumed. If the slaughterhouses were threatened to get their plants shut down for violating the rules, the employees would stop treating the animals so cruelly, therefore resulting in less cruelty towards animals.

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  50. If the Mali government also ban the practice of female genital mutilation, and provide education about FMG to males and females, it'll prevent women to have to go through this procedure.

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  52. Hunting is a sport to many which it benefits them various ways, but according to many others, it is known as animal cruelty and wants it to come to an end.

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  53. In response to Eberardo's thesis, there are in fact programs to help low income families such as welfare. Maybe there are specific low income families that should be targeted for government help programs.

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  54. The rising dropout rate has and will become a great threat to the population of students in urban high schools. There are social factors such as lack of familial sources for support, academic factors such as educational and cultural structure of urban high schools, and psychological factors such as constant exposure to a high dropout rate environment.

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  55. @Dennis What about teens that actually maintain a life style with video games that isn't isolated with family or friends? or doesn't have mental issues?

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  56. After the Second Amendment was added to the United States Constitution access for firearms has become easier leading to an increase in firearm violence and an increase to crime rates all over the United States. The United States Constitution needs to enforce stronger regulations when it comes to firearms.

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  57. Child labor is immoral and must end. For this to happen, companies must change the way they do business. If the do not choose to use fair labor practices and then exploit their workers, their products should be taken off the shelves and destroyed by the government.

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  58. @Ebony What incentives do you think the Japanese Government should provide for Japanese people. Also, why do you think that they haven't done so already?

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  59. @Lvbabl3_M3 What about LGBT students who have been through the LGBT languages and still live a sucessful life? How would you put that in your paper?

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  60. Drop out rates for Latino students are increasing due to the lack of funding in their homes and education. Is the DREAM Act enough to make it possible for students to complete their college education?

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  61. The cutters in Sudan, Africa are pressured by the economic situation in which they live, thus encouraging them to continue supporting Female Genital Mutilation, however if the government were to make FGM illegal and consequences harsh for violators of such a law, then the number of FGM victims would decline.

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  62. @gene dalusong

    in response to gene dalusong what kind of videos games are you talking about E-everybody E+10-everybody and older T-teen M-mature A-adult only RP-rating pending and how are they educational what should parents be worried about and what type of resource are they good for.

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  63. Why do woman stay in a relationship with men violent?

    ana: explain how this can affect them emotionaly and how they can end this endless cycle of women satying with them. you can also talk about how this can make the children feel and how a son can grow up thinking that it ok to be violent with your love one

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  64. @ Christopher: How would police brutality stop if police harass people of every race everyday?

    @ Erica: How would counseling have an effect on teens who are effected by domestic violence?

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  65. TO Kassandra: What specific group of people are you focusing on that have a history of the misuse of guns.
    Anther question, do you think the government should ratify the constitution to help diminish the number of peopel who misuse guns.

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  66. Taray Sanders Fremont high school shooting guard said............

    The G.P.A requirement is to low for high school students to play a sport thats a reason blacks dont have opp/s after high school cause you cant get into a college with the sports academic requirement.

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  67. to kejare
    In what ways will the govenment be able to ban FGM from happening?
    Are there any consequences that the govenment can put on the people that do the procedure?

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  68. For my young crip cuz terry.

    i feel its shouldnt be taking as a sport cause a animals. why they dont get put in jail for killing animals?

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  69. Those victims of human trafficking are by and large females (women and girls) who are promised to create a better life in a different country but are actually forced to become prostitutes. If there were harsher consequences for human traffickers, then the rate of sex slaves will decrease.

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  70. @AnaEsbeydi
    “Why do woman stay in a relationship with men violent?”
    -Can you rephrase your thesis so it can be improved? (:

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  71. @ Brenda

    though my other comment was taken down and i feel like my freedom of speech was violated non the less you are wrong Brenda. there is prove that kids have killed themselves and other because they heard to much violent music. Watch the award winning film Bowling for Columbine by the great writer producer and directer Micheal Moore and you will see that evidence for my question. You are ducking me and my questions and reason for that is because you cant properly answer my question because music can be helpful but not for every individual.

    so in conclusion Im RIGHT your WRONG...

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  72. @Jesus
    orly?
    ah doan no wut jew are sayin. ah eez an amehrikan.

    Michael moore is a communist.

    Bowling for Columbine is completely a waste of time. Just because those two kids shot up the school does not mean that the music was at fault. It's the parents fault for not having the time to listen to their child.

    this is almost like blaming Damien Echols and his other friends for the presumed murder and rape of those kids that never made it to school that morning...just because Jesse Misskelley, Damien and Jason wore black clothes, read about Aleister Crowley and listened to metal.

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